rhyme scheme was wonderful, this was one of the most unique love pomes i have read and i loved it a lot. i dont think this could have been better if u used a differnt pattern, but maybe. idk i love it the way it is, adn theres nothin i would change about this. but never be scared to love someone no matter who it is, be scared not to love someone. being scared of love means ur scared of your feelings, never let anyone make u scared of ur feelings there urs and no one can take them away from you. amazing poem it really moved me, nice job
tayla aka sick of hurtigng u.
i think the rhyme scheme was great, a fine piece truly, however the heart behind it is what disturbs me. It truly says that love can harm, but we both know love can't, because the girl in this gave the golden heart and it was broken down from inside her. But true love will build not break, give not steal, live though death itself and will not die, so she knows this but beacuse the pain is unbearable she will refuse to love again, so I tell to "her," rise up, stand, and love again.
Last stanza: best original, nonclichéd description of love I've seen in a while. That is saying something. Don't worry if you just don't want to have a boyfriend/girlfriend/whatever... or are afraid to. Plenty of people are. Otherwise, interesting read.
I dunno AABB rhyming is kinda played out. You need to have a perfect style and rhythm to make it work in our day and age. Don't get me wrong, the poem is ok but it would have been better if you used a diferent pattern.