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    dots Submission Name: Sleepless Dreamerdots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSleepless Dreamerdots
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    The night grows cold and the
    Covers seem to lessen the point of
    It all; A dull throb now, beating where I
    Lay.

    Iím impressionable and
    Tormented within my head and my
    Feet. One playback and Iím right where
    I started again.

    Something tangable and something
    Reliable; thatís all I really ever
    Needed. Itís all I ever really
    Wanted.

    Glistening pools line my pillow
    And the ignorance tumbled throughout my
    Head again. Itís an old story and an even older
    Sentiment.

    My worries subside as my head rests
    on your heart. The rhythmic waves
    Pull my eyes closed and sways my
    Dreams.




    Submitted on 2008-12-09 04:08:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If you really want to express your emotions it would be better if you do it indirectly. That way people will understand better. Just describing what you feel does not make a poem. You gotta twist words around untill they break and bleed, untill they scream out your own emotions...
    | Posted on 2008-12-09 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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