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    dots Submission Name: damn she looks like an angel right nowdots
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    Author: sota
    ASL Info:    17/m/fl
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 2/2/4
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Story/Love
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    dotsdamn she looks like an angel right nowdots
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    im in class right now.

    it's amazing how the male genes work,but i hate it somtimes.

    blue shirt, yellow pants,and a body that makes me take deep breaths as if im in the cold.

    i took one look,one that's all i did. she aint even got have an ass (the ass is not everything) she just. dammit i cant even right with good sence.

    and look at how i spelled write in my last sentence.that's not good for a man.

    you women must know what your doing when you walk past a man, or a man walks past you.

    i hate being in a state of love,it makes me wana talk to a female i dont even know.

    ok ima stop here, im done.
    i cant bear it anymore.





    Submitted on 2008-12-09 18:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this means much more than it says.
    | Posted on 2009-02-24 00:00:00 | by screams | [ Reply to This ]


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