I won't read too hard into you as you asked in your description, but I must say it was beautifully written.
It didn't have a lot of flowery imagery or anything overly amazing in it's quality. It just...was. I think it's simplicity was what made it actually perfect in the first place. You have talent certaintly.
The rhymes were not amazing, not overly wowing, but yet...perfect. I'm sorry to provide such a simple comment. But, darlin', it was perfect, I think.