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    dots Submission Name: Core to Nervedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 533
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 672



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    dotsCore to Nervedots
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    You can't break my heart
    It can only peel
    It's strong and it's tough
    Each layer is real

    As you tear down the coat
    It hurts now and again
    But much like a severe burn
    Pain dies where nerves end

    So burn if you must
    I promise no fun
    I no longer can feel
    A humorless pun

    But all muse is not lost
    For if you scrape and you grind
    Enough of it fades
    Leaving nothingness to find

    But the core is indeed tough
    And at it very dense
    It'll take more than games
    To assist with such sins





    Submitted on 2008-12-10 08:39:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I won't read too hard into you as you asked in your description, but I must say it was beautifully written.

    It didn't have a lot of flowery imagery or anything overly amazing in it's quality. It just...was. I think it's simplicity was what made it actually perfect in the first place. You have talent certaintly.

    The rhymes were not amazing, not overly wowing, but yet...perfect. I'm sorry to provide such a simple comment. But, darlin', it was perfect, I think.
    | Posted on 2008-12-11 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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