Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Youdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 465
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1258



    Description:
       Randomly wrote this, don't know what is like, can barely remember it just need to have it off school computers.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYoudots
    -------------------------------------------


    Scars you made so deep
    They still cut when you're not there
    No matter how hard I try
    I just can't deny that the world is not perfect
    It doesn't matter that I've never seen in months
    Still you cut at me
    The fact you ignore me
    The fact you don't care
    These facts mean nothing to you
    Much as all I ever do

    I try to grab your attention
    I slash my clothes
    I cut my hair
    I change my looks
    I change my ways
    I change myself
    No comments are made
    No feelings are shared
    Nothing is mentioned

    No matter what I do
    And no matter how hard I try
    You refuse to see me
    So here is news for you
    I have given up
    When I write that letter
    I won't say how it wasn't your fault
    I won't apologies for my weakness
    I will write loud and proud
    I will write
    'You did this to me
    You know you did
    It WAS your fault
    I WAS strong
    Strong enough to last this long
    Strong enough to fix my problems
    Strong enough to bring this to an end
    I WAS strong
    You WERE responsible'




    Submitted on 2008-12-10 11:28:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    168782

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Records I written by Raphael
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    untitled written by ShyOne
    Cover written by saartha
    The World written by jjd
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    Love written by saartha
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Carry written by saartha
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry