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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 491
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Randomly wrote this, don't know what is like, can barely remember it just need to have it off school computers.


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    Scars you made so deep
    They still cut when you're not there
    No matter how hard I try
    I just can't deny that the world is not perfect
    It doesn't matter that I've never seen in months
    Still you cut at me
    The fact you ignore me
    The fact you don't care
    These facts mean nothing to you
    Much as all I ever do

    I try to grab your attention
    I slash my clothes
    I cut my hair
    I change my looks
    I change my ways
    I change myself
    No comments are made
    No feelings are shared
    Nothing is mentioned

    No matter what I do
    And no matter how hard I try
    You refuse to see me
    So here is news for you
    I have given up
    When I write that letter
    I won't say how it wasn't your fault
    I won't apologies for my weakness
    I will write loud and proud
    I will write
    'You did this to me
    You know you did
    It WAS your fault
    I WAS strong
    Strong enough to last this long
    Strong enough to fix my problems
    Strong enough to bring this to an end
    I WAS strong
    You WERE responsible'




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