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    dots Submission Name: What If I Were Different?dots
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    Author: FlickerofHope
    ASL Info:    17/Male/TN
    Elite Ratio:    7.15 - 92/82/34
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 661
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1059



    Description:
       This poem spawned from the conversation a friend and I had about how different a person would be psychologically and socially if they were taught that the color blue was actually called red. So I got to thinking about how 1 thing could really alter someone's life drastically, so then I wondered how life would change if we switch the names of "good" and "evil." Interesting idea, don't you think?


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    dotsWhat If I Were Different?dots
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    What if I were different?
    What if my normal
    Wasn't the same as yours?

    What if the darkness
    Embodied hope and joy
    And instead it was the light
    That represented evil and suffering?

    What if hate
    Provided elation and comfort
    But love was the thing
    That broke us all apart?

    What if war
    Encompassed all that was right and justified
    And it was peace
    That caused us to go to waste?

    And how about happiness?
    What if it were the dark emotion
    And what if sadness
    Made everything bright and cheery?

    So, as you see
    Everything in our lives
    Depends on our assumptions
    That everything we know is true
    That everything we know is normal

    But what if everything evil
    Were now pronounced good
    And everything good
    Is condemned to be evil?

    How so much would change
    If you changed your perspective
    Even a little




    Submitted on 2008-12-10 13:09:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it alot.It portrays alot of emotions and it explains alot of deep feelings.
    | Posted on 2008-12-18 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude this poem is extremly deep man. I puts a whole new prespective on what we all think to be the way things are. I think this could either be a dark poem or Deep poetry as well. I think of life this way quite often and I don't often feel the way people do but more like the way your poem makes things. I like the stanza...

    What if the darkness
    Embodied hope and joy
    And instead it was the light
    That represented evil and suffering?

    And...

    And how about happiness?
    What if it were the dark emotion
    And what if sadness
    Made everything bright and cheery?

    Those 2 make me think of how life is for me. This is why I have added this poem to my favs.
    | Posted on 2008-12-10 00:00:00 | by Sepheroth432 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very interesting perspective. Nice way to make people actually think about a poem instead of just reading it. Yeah I wouldn't really classify this as dark either maybe you should change it. I would classify it as maybe society because society would be different if this was the perspective; What is...? because again on the perspective and really your poem is just asking questions; Satire because it is kind or ironic to think of the world to be in the way you ask us to think about it as. Those are just suggestions classify it as you want.

    Just thought to point out that you have a typo on 'everything.' Other then that the poem is really good. I truly do like the way you make us think about our perception to the world. Really though this is true, in America guys shows signs of friendship by a quick easy punch to the arm but in other parts of the world that would be considered an insult. Guys walk around holding hands for friendship while we consider that to be gayness. There are many other things but that is just to show that your poem really does kind of talk about how changing a perspective changes almost everything.

    Your stanza
    'And how about happiness?
    What if it were the dark emotion
    And what if sadness
    Made everything bright and cheery?'
    reminds me of my stanza on "Depression".

    I don't see any problems with the poem as in the typical errors people normally make. So good job on that.
    | Posted on 2008-12-10 00:00:00 | by DemonofHeaven | [ Reply to This ]


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