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    dots Submission Name: Love Can Heal... Right? Revisiondots
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    Author: churro1990
    ASL Info:    18 male san bernardino
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 541
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsLove Can Heal... Right? Revisiondots
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    First of all I just want to say that this is not an original. I borrowed it from Kaygirl, who is a great writer. Sorry. I just liked it so much that I wanted to see if I could make my own version. please forgive me.




    Love Can Heal Right? Revision

    Love twists and turns, bleeds and churns,
    It yearns, making you wish for more than the,
    Heart can give, its trust and faith, but also death and pain,
    Expressions and lust, with want and with need,
    So many things, with so much potential,
    But still so afraid, of what will next come.
    No one knows what comes next, or even who,
    Comes next, only knowing the hurt and glow,
    Only knowing of the love and the pain,
    Only knowing what one can truly show.
    But no one can show what truly is felt,
    Only what others are willing to see.
    So in the end it matters only that,
    You love as willingly as possible.





    Submitted on 2008-12-10 20:06:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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