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    dots Submission Name: away from strifedots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 471
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1263



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    dotsaway from strifedots
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    im stunned shot down
    the gun is still smoking
    the words you have said
    they play on my mind
    destroyed my heart leaving open wounds

    i need to get away
    leave this all behind
    escape the words you said
    they cut so bad
    my heart is torn apart
    how can i ever recover

    you have walked out of my life
    the things you said are stabbing me like a knife
    the wounds are all wide open
    they will heal but the scars will never go
    my heart is numb and beating really slow
    if it stops ill just let go

    i need to get away
    leave this all behind
    escape the words you said
    they cut so bad
    my heart is torn apart
    how can i ever recover

    will i ever recover and live again
    will i forever feel the strain
    maybe i should leave this place behind
    find a new life away from this strife
    i could be free as a different me

    im going to run away
    leave all this behind
    you didnt mean the words you said
    now you miss me and want me back
    its too late ive left this place
    im starting a new life away from this strife





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      I like this one alot. the part
    you have walked out of my life
    the things you said are stabbing me like a knife
    the wounds are all wide open
    they will heal but the scars will never go
    my heart is numb and beating really slow
    if it stops ill just let go

    it really gets to me. it is how i feel.
    | Posted on 2008-12-13 00:00:00 | by BloodLustKira | [ Reply to This ]


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