Sprawled-Eagle on the Driveway by silverdrika

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Submission Name: Sprawled-Eagle on the Driveway dots

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Author:	silverdrika
ASL Info:	22/F/Brasil
Elite Ratio:	6.08 - 127/118/42
Words:	102

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	101
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	597

Description:
General feeling of discardibility.

Wasn't really lying in the driveway... it was raining that night. Listening to Andy McKee's Nakagawa-San.

Sprawled-Eagle on the Driveway dots

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I don’t think the moon has noticed me tonight, at least not yet
It pays attention to the layman’s serenade
And his lass while I fade as a smudge on this concrete driveway
I feel that bitter draft onset me subtly
Don’t bite back, don’t fight for me
Because the moon has not noticed me tonight, at least not yet
It sees the poet, the disclaimer,
The girl who does not know that I blame her
She does not know, not tonight, let her know tomorrow
But don’t bite back, don’t fight for what you can later borrow
—it might still exist.

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  you feel alone in this poem , but you fight battles for yourself , the night of day has not recognize you in a certain way , there is a cause that is holding you back , great poem with a mystery intrigue
| Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
  you feel alone in this poem , but you fight battles for yourself , the night of day has not recognize you in a certain way , there is a cause that is holding you back , great poem with a mystery intrigue
| Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
  i know where you're coming from when you say that you weren't literally in your driveway. but all one has to do is think this and suddenly it becomes reality in literature: that ability to place oneself in that situation and be able to relate through imagery these... emotional contexts. and what i felt was a sense of hopelessness, a sense that one is just a small ant in this world, wondering, always wondering. and feeling alone and in need... of something fresh and vibrant.

i think i may have actually done this one night. maybe not a driveway but in a field somewhere, dressed only in shorts, staring up at the sky while i got soaked to the bone. there's a freedom in it, a recklessness and spirit which is a part of me, and which i'll never deny.

but you deal with the sadness that comes with this territory, of wanting to fade away and forget perhaps.

this is aching.
| Posted on 2008-12-21 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]

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