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    dots Submission Name: Sprawled-Eagle on the Drivewaydots
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    Author: silverdrika
    ASL Info:    22/F/Brasil
    Elite Ratio:    5.94 - 127/123/43
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       General feeling of discardibility.

    Wasn't really lying in the driveway... it was raining that night. Listening to Andy McKee's Nakagawa-San.


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    dotsSprawled-Eagle on the Drivewaydots
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    I donít think the moon has noticed me tonight, at least not yet
    It pays attention to the laymanís serenade
    And his lass while I fade as a smudge on this concrete driveway
    I feel that bitter draft onset me subtly
    Donít bite back, donít fight for me
    Because the moon has not noticed me tonight, at least not yet
    It sees the poet, the disclaimer,
    The girl who does not know that I blame her
    She does not know, not tonight, let her know tomorrow
    But donít bite back, donít fight for what you can later borrow
    óit might still exist.




    Submitted on 2008-12-11 00:28:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you feel alone in this poem , but you fight battles for yourself , the night of day has not recognize you in a certain way , there is a cause that is holding you back , great poem with a mystery intrigue
    | Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      you feel alone in this poem , but you fight battles for yourself , the night of day has not recognize you in a certain way , there is a cause that is holding you back , great poem with a mystery intrigue
    | Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      i know where you're coming from when you say that you weren't literally in your driveway. but all one has to do is think this and suddenly it becomes reality in literature: that ability to place oneself in that situation and be able to relate through imagery these... emotional contexts. and what i felt was a sense of hopelessness, a sense that one is just a small ant in this world, wondering, always wondering. and feeling alone and in need... of something fresh and vibrant.

    i think i may have actually done this one night. maybe not a driveway but in a field somewhere, dressed only in shorts, staring up at the sky while i got soaked to the bone. there's a freedom in it, a recklessness and spirit which is a part of me, and which i'll never deny.

    but you deal with the sadness that comes with this territory, of wanting to fade away and forget perhaps.

    this is aching.
    | Posted on 2008-12-21 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]


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