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    dots Submission Name: its reddots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 332
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       yo, so im here at my friends house right now and i think think this is shit. fuck you couch bitch

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsits reddots

    where am i in this world
    lost of inspiration
    where is my temptation
    my creation
    is being taken
    now im faking
    like im taking
    off my scars
    while i smile at stars
    hella far
    i can see mars
    with its tar
    while im driving in your car
    and its red
    like it is in my head
    when my nose bled
    look at the stories your fed
    whats it really like being dead
    have you heard anything ive just said
    what are you doing
    where are you going
    dont look at me like that
    bitch youll get slapped
    you couldnt even slap back
    now i see what you lack

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      "where am i in this world
    lost of inspiration
    where is my temptation
    my creation
    is being taken
    now im faking"

    My favorite part.
    because i can really relate to the idea behind this.
    i had lost my muse a while back.
    and it sucked.
    i was just putting down words.
    and [censored] came out.
    now... idk if i even fully have it back.

    but i'm there with ya.
    | Posted on 2009-04-16 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]
      thanx for the reply if you want to chanfe the title you could really offset the posts
    you could title it extremity or breakdown

    | Posted on 2008-12-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      hey and hi

    this was great bold and funny
    i liked the word placements as well

    | Posted on 2008-12-11 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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