Tears of curiosity
Falling from this face
Of shame
I'm just like
The fly in the window
I'm not gonna
Go away
Hide the food
So I won't spoil
Everything
For everyone
Head throbbing
Just make
It all go
Away
Dissolve my world
Take it all away
hmm, kinda different, like a lot of random thoughts put together, almost like you could take one line from this and create a whole nother poem/thought and it would still seem completely orginal... not sure about a title, but what ever comes to you, almost anything could fit.
i like it. it just gives a brief acount of alot of feelings. i like the fly in the window comparison. as for a title what about doing what i di when i cant think of one. just pic a cool line and call it that. it could be 'tears of silance' or 'the fly in the window'. just something to get the person intersted
I am impressed with the structure you chose for this piece of work. It really compliments the style you chose to write in. Also the analogy of the protaganist being akin to a fly was brilliant and really gave the reader a since for the level of depression and outsidesh feelings your talking about here. All and all great poem. I have no suggestions for perfection.
I can tell its mixed emotions, I've wrote quite a similar one to that, its called, would ya believe it...emotions. I like pieces like this, cause they let you get to know the author better than some other styles do. Anyway (your avator pretty cool) good write.
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