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    dots Submission Name: Am I Still Alive?dots
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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAm I Still Alive?dots
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    Am i still alive in your eyes
    Can you even tell that i see through your lies
    What will it take to make you see
    I really want you to have the key
    Key to my heart

    Am i still alive to you
    To me it feels like you flew
    Flew away so far
    You always seem to be in that bar
    With all those other girls

    Am i still alive to you deep inside
    Why don't we take a step back and rewind
    Back to the days where you made me smile
    Didn't make me feel in denial
    Denial of our love

    Am i still alive?




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      once again your poem is full of emotion. Deeply, and clearly exspressing the feeling of a relationship faiding. somthing so many people have to go through these days. I think people who have had to go through such a thing, will apreciate this peice of writing.

    Grimm R.
    | Posted on 2008-12-13 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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