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    dots Submission Name: Can't You See What You Mean To Me?dots
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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1917
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Another one of my strange poems


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    dotsCan't You See What You Mean To Me?dots
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    Canít you see what you mean to me?
    Canít you tell that youíre all I need?
    I just want to let you know
    That my love it grows
    Keeps on growing just for you
    And I donít know what to do

    I feel so trapped inside
    And all I want is for you to make me feel alive
    Youíre going to drive me crazy
    I donít care if youíre getting lazy
    But I need to know now
    Just how
    How you plan making this
    So stop taking the piss

    This is my life
    And I need to know if really want me as your wife
    If this love is real
    Let me feel
    Feel it deep within
    Within this broken heart of mine




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      It's a nice poem. Kind of a nice way of calling out to someone, wanting them to know what you feel for them. The guy that was being called out to in the poem would be very lucky for someone wanting to be his wife and showing her true feeling. It's a bit short though, no offense, but you may have showed more about how the girl was showing her love for him and it's a long lasting one, even if not forever, but a long lasting one. It may be interpreted as a cry from an emo girl but it depends on people and at least you didn't express much on what would happen if the girl was rejected. Overall, it's a nice short read.

    ~Rei
    | Posted on 2009-01-29 00:00:00 | by ReikuTohno | [ Reply to This ]


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