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    dots Submission Name: The Strangest Nightdots
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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 451
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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       A strange one xD


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    dotsThe Strangest Nightdots
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    I was walking in a park one day
    When from behind a tree there peered
    A strange man and a girl named May
    I stopped and steered
    Off into the other direction
    Then as i past another bush
    There was a man with a huge erection
    He stood there and just said hush

    After i left that strange man i headed off
    Towards the fountain so big
    There i heard a cough
    From behind there was a boy eating a little fig
    As i stared in disbelief at the way this night had gone
    The little boy turned and said
    Hey you want a scone
    Hey can we go to bed

    I was so shocked i was so freaked
    My god this night had been so strange
    I just hoped that that was the peak
    Now people really think i am deranged




    Submitted on 2008-12-11 12:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was humorous. I like how you showed it step by step how you ran into each person. the only critique i really have is that u mispelled disbelief
    | Posted on 2008-12-13 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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