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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsIndividualitydots
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    Through-out time we have fought for individuality
    Fought for rights to make us equal yet still individual
    So why are we trying to be like other people
    Everyone pretending to be someone else
    Trying so hard to be like them
    That we forget the death that came to seperate us
    The struggle that they all went through just to make our lives better
    So when you see that girl dressed like that
    Or boy with his hair like that
    Maybe we should just pass on by
    Be true to ourselves and act the way you should
    Be the way you are truely
    Be yourself




    Submitted on 2008-12-11 12:59:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank you for the comment
    Most of my recently posted were written late night and in a hurry so I haven't had time to read through them for corrections.
    Glad you like though

    ~ <3 ~ Nix ~ <3 ~
    | Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by NixLacus | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I quite liked this. Simple, straight forward, gets the point across and shows depth.

    My only real criticism would be the structure. I think the content of the lines was good, but they seemed a little clumsy in places. I know this was done in free verse, but I think it could've flowed more smoothly.

    And sorry to sound pedantic, but there's no hypen in "through-out".

    I shall leave you with this thought: Is it possible for a human being to truely be an individual?

    :) Alex
    | Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]


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