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    dots Submission Name: Realitydots
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    Author: LighterFluid
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pluto
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 11/9/5
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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       well i am not sure if this is just a write or a poem but what ever


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    dotsRealitydots
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    The tension in the room filled as copper blades slice
    More and more did i wonder if it were real

    What is your definition of reality?
    Something you can feel, smell, hear...

    because i feel and hear in my dreams,
    yet i am not sure where the fine line is...

    Cropped like a picture,
    we see what we want.




    Submitted on 2008-12-11 15:34:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    this is the song i immediately thought of when i read the first coupla lines... possibly for similar word choice.
    i realise the song doesnt fit your intent perfectly but it does fit somewhere for me...

    all this talk of actors and reality and whats real and whats not... i dont know... there are days when i definitely feel invisible and/or part of some pre-recorded play... you know... like dejavu meets reincarnation or instant replay or something... the merging of past present and future to make one big mess...


    and i guess youre right... we do see what we want to see... hindsight is always best lived after the fact... you can scratch and/or colour anything you want to...

    realising you wrote this one a while back what are your thoughts on it now...? if you were going to change or add anything to this what would it be?
    | Posted on 2010-03-21 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      And this is a question we must all ask ourselves at one point. What truly is reality? What we can sense with our five senses. But if we were to find out, we had more senses then five? Would that change the equation? Is there more to everything around us then what is simply standing in front of us?

    Very nice, sir. It brings up a lot of questions and makes people think. That's a good thing, opening our minds to greater things. Not only that, but it is worded very well. I like the visual it gives you in the beginning, "The tension in the room filled as copper blades slice
    More and more did i wonder if it were real"

    My opinion on reality is that it differs with each person and is merely a perspective. Reality=Of the Realm
    | Posted on 2009-02-02 00:00:00 | by Eyamma | [ Reply to This ]
      reason is the illusion of reality
    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Its kind of silly to be "real" in the first place,Im convinced its all a joke and we dont actually exist at all,its a big conspiracy!!!!!

    Nothing chatting to nothing leaving nothing comments about nothing but I did like your poem or write or whatever you think it is so coola boola

    Im sure Ill rediscover planbte earth soon

    nice...

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2008-12-11 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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