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    dots Submission Name: Driven to Distractiondots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDriven to Distractiondots

    Driven to Distraction

    Canít help it
    Canít do anything about it
    An innocent photo
    Her word repeated
    Re-read and re-initiated
    Swims me through
    Her soul
    Finds my spirit
    Traversing the spaces
    Hanging with kisses

    She repeats
    And replete
    On tantalizings
    Almost tasted
    I fall
    Canít help it
    Canít do anything about it
    In the images
    She painted
    The rick and cot
    Of desire
    In sheets and pillows
    I hear her giggles
    Under flushing eyes

    What am I to do
    With these
    Vacant longings
    As they travel
    Horizon from me to you
    What am I to do
    With this hearts
    And heads infatuated
    As it lays at night
    Jostling and turning
    In the empty
    Of wantings
    My lips to feed
    And sate this hungrily
    Distraction driven

    I canít help it
    Canít control it
    This aching trespass
    With words imparted
    The succinct
    And salivated story
    Of her
    Sends me crushing
    And cruising
    Heat semaphores
    Towards her

    And in the meal of love
    I would dine
    On sustenance passion
    Eat her
    Through my every fiber
    If but once
    I could
    Hold her

    Canít help it
    Canít do anything about it
    Canít control it

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