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    dots Submission Name: Endurancedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 596
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    Bytes: 664



    Description:
       Mostly a vague description and personal metaphors. Also stating some ongoing principles.


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    dots Endurancedots
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    Let's see if it can be done
    the catapult of honorable things
    into the winter
    chapping your face
    and ripe, rotting summer sun

    Allow it to fade
    like light into the dawn
    dripping down canvas oil skies

    A dryer hand could not be found
    dry without the moisture in your lips

    Kissing the water in the shower as it comes out from the faucet

    Let's see if it can be done
    written like a novel,
    a classic paradox

    A long drive down a long road
    And parking at the first redlight
    gives away the ending





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      Perserverence? Things you do when the world and the forces of nature seem to be against you to remind yourself to persever -- shower, drive?
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