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    dots Submission Name: Tears into Raindots
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    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 782
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 966



    Description:
       After 2 years of running from people, all together... I have found someone that takes the numbness away. It feels good to feel.


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    dotsTears into Raindots
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    I've long-since kissed the snake of death
    A long-awaited birth of a different kind of breath
    I take this moment with fist upon fist
    In fear it will fade if I run to resist
    The moon above all, spoke of a sign
    Gravitation to a world I had left behind

    Humble you stand as a man of might
    Strongly convinced that this bond is just right
    Taken by the hand of hardship and pain
    Together we can turn these tears into rain

    Lost was my peace in the heart of my soul
    Not much to muster without any goal
    You found me in pieces too tired to try
    Now alive once again and able to cry
    Embraced in your realm of protection and love
    No longer in the cold with only one glove

    Humble you stand as a man of the night
    Showing me life is more than a fight
    Taken by the hand of honor and regret
    A beautiful storm to never forget




    Submitted on 2008-12-14 05:53:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wonderful love poem, that describes a transition from hopelessness and fear to trust and adoration very well. This would be a difficult subject to write on, and you have done it brilliantly!

    Excellent work, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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