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    dots Submission Name: The Egged Truthdots

    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsThe Egged Truthdots

    Remember Humpty Dumpty
    so lumpty assumpty
    that he could sit on wall
    and deny gravity's call ?

    He the mixed-up entity
    wanting he to be she
    thinking drop from distance wee
    could end this depravity.

    But like all blokes ,
    windy, puffed-up hopes,
    thinking faith and lie would cope
    with reason and foolish dope.

    Though egg has balanced act,
    a fall can cause it to crack
    and no king, though of fact,
    has never fallen from a horse's back.

    So why a horse who loves an egg
    would try to patch an egg
    if indeed an egg is egg
    and not a stone shaped like egg ?

    To put an end to this ditty,
    country boy should live in city
    where walls are more than witty
    that King Hope can use some pity.

    Submitted on 2008-12-14 05:53:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this one.

    I like how you took a Fairy Tale and kinda twisted it around to be a metaphor for something serious. Usually, when one reads Humpty Dumpty you just laugh and don't take it or any of the characters seriously or really think about what it means. This added a lot of depth and dimension to a classic.

    Bravo!! ^_^
    | Posted on 2008-12-14 00:00:00 | by seoul_mecht | [ Reply to This ]
      wow man all i got to say is that this poem is a trip. i can't even describe the ryme affect. i had to read it like 5 times to get it all without big awkward pauses.....in my head....that is. it reads like a twisty dr suess. some sort of silly little lullaby that makes you laugh and want to cry. blah you have me thinking in riddly ryme.

    well, srry for that.

    the metaphor is so loose that, depending on how you follow it , idk like it's funny, but idk.

    really all i got to say is i'm nt so sure i have a clue what it means, but that i still want to add it to my favs cuz it has a strong appeal. it's like a political riddle. sort of mimicking it's subject, and specifically i can't tell, but i think it'll be worth the time to read.

    thanks for the read

    sorry for the lack of coherency.
    | Posted on 2008-12-14 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]

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