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    dots Submission Name: Kiss of Relief dots

    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Quick, simple, doohicki... I just threw this together at 1 am because I am being haunted by these beautiful blue eyes.

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    dotsKiss of Relief dots

    Breath-taking is a kiss
    of poetry in motion
    Nothing to miss
    in the midst of an ocean

    The unbreakable wall
    of concrete and stone
    Crumbled in the fall
    of a solemn throne

    The grasp of my fear
    in the arms of relief
    Leaving this tear
    so suddenly brief

    I've been conquered by a kiss
    so real and so right
    Embraced within bliss
    of the most beautiful night

    Caught in the grasp
    of your hypnotic blues
    You are the clasp
    of a new-found muse

    Submitted on 2008-12-14 06:01:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      most delightful rhyme and meter in this highly whimsical and sooo romantic piece of poetry.. Loved it, loved it.... michael
    | Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, I am amazed that such a delightful poem has no comments! This is an excellent love poem, and I congratulate you on your efforts. Lucky the guy who has the blue eyes!!
    | Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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