Kiss of Relief by Jessa

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Submission Name: Kiss of Relief dots

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Author:	Jessa
ASL Info:	29/f/pa
Elite Ratio:	3.73 - 221/209/73
Words:	88

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	1050
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	599

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Quick, simple, doohicki... I just threw this together at 1 am because I am being haunted by these beautiful blue eyes.

Kiss of Relief dots

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Breath-taking is a kiss
of poetry in motion
Nothing to miss
in the midst of an ocean

The unbreakable wall
of concrete and stone
Crumbled in the fall
of a solemn throne

The grasp of my fear
in the arms of relief
Leaving this tear
so suddenly brief

I've been conquered by a kiss
so real and so right
Embraced within bliss
of the most beautiful night

Caught in the grasp
of your hypnotic blues
You are the clasp
of a new-found muse

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most delightful rhyme and meter in this highly whimsical and sooo romantic piece of poetry.. Loved it, loved it.... michael
| Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
Again, I am amazed that such a delightful poem has no comments! This is an excellent love poem, and I congratulate you on your efforts. Lucky the guy who has the blue eyes!!
| Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.