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Trapped


Author: doppelganger
ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34 /223 /160
Words: 65
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Pretty much how life feels to me right now.


Trapped



Miss Arachnid
Curls her fingers in delight
                          My wings are splayed

There is a guide-book somewhere
Of this game that's to be played

But here am I
                The lowly fly
With no eyes to see the rules

Can only hear the free ones
Buzzing contentedly by




Submitted on 2008-12-14 14:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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