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Author: doppelganger
ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34 /223 /160
Words: 107
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just a metaphorical expression of what's been changing these past few months. I know it's not great, or good, or even worth reading probably. But it's there.


Gelatin valleys content in nostalgia
It's eating the villagers alive
Those far off dark nights
And mild air on the cheeks
The castle I built here

Gears turning left and right
to the beat of an elevator dirge
No tie, but the hypothetical one
It may be homicide

When the gasoline that fueled
This futile quest
Was exchanged for the cheaper
      Harder to get
      Better for you

The dolls I set at the table
Pecked out their own eyes
And sit there, waiting
For the signal

To live

Submitted on 2008-12-14 15:06:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you know there's something in the disjointedness(not sure if that's a word but i like to coin my own phrases) of this that gives it a good quality.

The dolls I set at the table
Pecked out their own eyes
And sit there, waiting
For the signal

To live

people use the "doll" thing alot, never heard that one. from this poem you have a unique voice. i say it's good for that. originality get's many stars from me. so her it is many stars

ENJOY and thank you for the write.
| Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]

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