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    dots Submission Name: I Cry Inside dots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.83 - 262/263/207
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 104
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1567



    Description:
       I think I cried a little just writing it. Again, this was painful to write because anything I write about that is about him is painful for me. Tell me what you think.

    Dedication: Christopher Lynch


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    I cry inside every time I look at you
    because I don't want it to end,
    but everyday that I'm with you,
    it seems as if we're closer to the end.
    Everything is coming too fast
    and I just want them to stop.

    I cry inside every time I look at you
    because I think that will be the last time
    I can look at you and call you mine,
    my love, my life.
    I'm afraid that the next time we're alone,
    things will end because nothing seems to work.

    I cry inside every time I look at you
    because I don't want to lose you,
    but it seems like you are going
    to let go of me very soon.
    And I'm not ready to let go yet.
    I'm not sure if I will ever be ready.

    I cry inside every time I look at you
    because it seems as if
    you are going to walk out of my life
    and I don't want you gone.
    I'm not ready to be on my own again,
    when I really want to be with you.

    I cry inside every time I look at you
    because it seems as if
    you've grown tired of me,
    and will soon move on,
    while I'm stuck in the past.

    I cry inside every time I look at you
    because I'm afraid to show you my tears.
    Because I love you and it seems like
    everything is over between us.
    I cry a little inside because
    as much as I want this to work,
    It doesn't seem like it ever will.




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      i think you did a lovely job in the way u let your feelings across. i do love the flow to it, and as i do not know the story behind this i cant not say or give advice for sure, but i dont think if you love him this much and it is clear you do, dont keep thining about waht could happen think about ur love for him. the more u think u will break up, the faster it will happen. because in ur head ur seting it up already. so try to let go of thoes thoughts just enought to c. i only hope im helping and not making anything harder for you. if u ever need to talk im a good person to come to.lol..... well on the writing note i say nice job.
    tayla aka sickofhurting u
    | Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      you know what this poem has a beautiful sentiment. the form is mediocre....just in my bad taste......but it captures a touching moment and in such a relatable way that it's nothing to be concerned with.


    very nice
    | Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]


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