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    dots Submission Name: Mad Monkeydots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMad Monkeydots
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    Mad Monkey

    The last summer
    The last breath of the world
    The last leaf
    Has fallen
    Bud open
    Will not return
    From the fell
    Chain saw

    The arms and roots
    Branches filigree
    Lungs
    Breath no more
    Of life
    Continuous

    Mad monkey

    Set a fire in your house
    Plagiarise the healing mists
    As commonplace
    Throw your misunderstanding
    Into the briar patch
    And hang from the bow
    The gaunt edifice
    Of fraudulent civilizations empire

    The last piece of the puzzle
    In the jigsaw of denial
    Grabs its placatory moment
    And sucks through the straw
    Its sweet tasting milk shake

    Impoverished soil
    The last winter
    The final gust
    Of clean air
    Wilted flower
    Suffocated

    Mad Monkey

    Chokes on gratifications
    Plethora of extinction
    Tosses inconsequential litter
    To the ground
    Of its own foot prints
    Poisoned
    By its own greed
    For life

    The lost summer
    The lost breath of the world
    The fatal leaf
    Is falling
    Open bud
    Can not return
    From the fell
    Chain saw

    Of time













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