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    dots Submission Name: chained to this worlddots

    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 500
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       it's about insomnia, and how i sometimes tend to tear myself to pieces when i can't sleep

    machine head is a good song, all credit to gavin rossdale of bush i am a huge fan.

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    dotschained to this worlddots

    subject writhes
    bed feels like a table

    unable to close
    those wired eyes
    kill the red electric light

    millions of scalpel thoughts
    racing machine head
    slicing through
    pink mind tissue
    what will I find?

    some anomaly or idiosyncrasy
    from society's definiton "normalcy"
    or some strange tic inside my brain
    to explain the torture
    raging wide-eyed hell

    engine running strong
    assembly line stands still
    until sun-up

    time to get up
    and the day goes on
    and on
    and on

    don't yawn because
    you're boring
    in my head

    swear it's true
    I care
    I care
    but i'm not really there

    long for the night, shut tired eyes
    and try
    and cry

    doing time
    but why was i
    given a life sentence
    for some dream crime
    forget the reason
    this rhyme is like a rubix cube
    i can't just take the stickers off
    and my hands are tied
    and i sigh
    and i die
    each and every
    fucking time

    Submitted on 2008-12-15 19:49:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this!! its pretty twisted...i like this kind of stuff...awesome job... ;)
    | Posted on 2009-05-07 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]

    I understand...

    It is like you're endlessly running through the "motions" like that of a machine, so callous, so cold and you can see this but do nothing about it. Like the misery of watching yourself die in third person, distant and satalited. Things that shouldnt mean so much mean so much, such frivilous things like sleep. Trapped, so much apathy in this write.

    You should revise this and expand on the misery.
    | Posted on 2009-01-05 00:00:00 | by Black-Wall | [ Reply to This ]

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