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    dots Submission Name: Mixturedots
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    Author: Little Gal
    ASL Info:    20 female, Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 469/431/94
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1025
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    Bytes: 312



    Description:
       i can't really remember who it was on this site, who told me that they only write poems by personifying inanimate objects, and that they wish to write something like me. I very rarely personify inanimate objects, so i tried this.Try to guess what I am talking about! Let me in on your thoughts!


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    dotsMixturedots
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    Swirling round and around
    Mixing between two different people
    Slowly diffusing
    Diversifying from one person to another
    Turning slowly to a mixture
    In love with each other
    The essence of each
    Creeping into that of the other
    Slowly we find a newborn




    Submitted on 2004-07-10 23:47:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very abstract but it works. cool rose! i like the swirling around & around part and the mixing. i picture you reading this in a cafe with a dj while he's scratching a mix on vinyl; just to add a touch. cool.
    | Posted on 2004-07-10 00:00:00 | by pioneerheart | [ Reply to This ]
      loved the picture. your poem was really good.
    loved the ending. keep up the good work.
    hope to read more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2004-07-10 00:00:00 | by lonely poet | [ Reply to This ]
      love the picture like the poem i think i might read more of your works!
    the wording certiainly had me i wich it was longer though
    | Posted on 2004-07-11 00:00:00 | by death22881 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this, it started off really well, and i was really geting into the wrie then it jsut ends abruptly to me it seems like there should be a bit more to it, to me right whenit really caught my eye it ends. but it was good
    | Posted on 2004-07-11 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      So gigglygirl thinks it stopped too soon and too quickly, well look at the subject, sometimes thats the way it goes! But to your poem, I think you need to check L-4 and make it "from one person to another"
    later,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-12 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      You: Can you guess what "Mixtures" Was about?

    Well, your last line is both a clue and a misdirection.
    Many probably assume this is about sex, but I've never known anyone to "slowly" find a newborn (should be a newborn, not an newborn) No, the discovery that you are going to have a baby comes quite abruptly, so I'm thinking that the newborn is love, or a couple becoming one through amalgamation. Am I on the track?
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      u naughty naughty.. it was funny that u have written something that is adult oriented and it is passionate peice of work
    well what prompted u to write this, i have no idea, but this is one peice that will find its place in my fav's
    bye
    | Posted on 2004-07-15 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]


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