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    dots Submission Name: beautiful snowflakesdots

    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 656
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       From November '04. It's super short but it's one of only a few things I actually really like

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    dotsbeautiful snowflakesdots

    The snowflakes are lies,
    so delicately made.
    Piling up before our eyes.
    Blinded by beauty.
    But what fun it is to deceive!
    How easily they believe!
    The snow melts-
    but the lies never fade.

    Submitted on 2008-12-16 06:28:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this because i can relate 2 it verrrrry personally, *sigh ...women. i dont have much else 2 say, it speaks the truth in a simple and creative way. thanks...i will look at snowflakes differently from now on. ;p
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by PO3TiKPO1SON | [ Reply to This ]
      Good work on the subject of deception. The sway of words are like a see-saw,like wind blowing the snow. Your last two lines are the mime of the story. Deception lasts until the truth is known then the deciver is branded forever. I especially liked the first two lines. Rain(the liar), snow(the gullible), two twins diffrently dressed.
    | Posted on 2009-01-16 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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