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    dots Submission Name: beautiful snowflakesdots
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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 602
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 277



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       From November '04. It's super short but it's one of only a few things I actually really like


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    dotsbeautiful snowflakesdots
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    The snowflakes are lies,
    so delicately made.
    Piling up before our eyes.
    Blinded by beauty.
    But what fun it is to deceive!
    How easily they believe!
    The snow melts-
    but the lies never fade.




    Submitted on 2008-12-16 06:28:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this because i can relate 2 it verrrrry personally, *sigh ...women. i dont have much else 2 say, it speaks the truth in a simple and creative way. thanks...i will look at snowflakes differently from now on. ;p
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by PO3TiKPO1SON | [ Reply to This ]
      Good work on the subject of deception. The sway of words are like a see-saw,like wind blowing the snow. Your last two lines are the mime of the story. Deception lasts until the truth is known then the deciver is branded forever. I especially liked the first two lines. Rain(the liar), snow(the gullible), two twins diffrently dressed.
    | Posted on 2009-01-16 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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