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    dots Submission Name: Eyes In The Mirror dots
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    Author: my shadow
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       Making the connection from lonely to loved.


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    When nothing is as it seems,
    and dreams may be just dreams;
    When hours, days and years are not real,
    just an invention to keep us turning at the wheel;
    When the eyes in the mirror don't see me at all,
    and my voice is just an echo in an empty hall;
    When I wonder why is there a why?
    What makes me laugh or cry?
    Then I remember you,
    The days we knew;
    Your smiling face,
    Our lover's embrace.




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      This is beautifully written
    | Posted on 2013-12-22 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this could be published. Really, 'cuz I don't sugarcoat it.
    | Posted on 2011-01-31 00:00:00 | by Undead37 | [ Reply to This ]
      The thought of everything back in your past comes back reflecting off mirrors that surround you and one can clearly see their face smoldering over, like play dough.This is what I thought of it a first until you began to express love and memories.All the time that goes by year after year, is what I got for the first three lines.

    "When the eyes in the mirror don't see me at all,"
    Kinda makes me think about all the things I've been through so far.Good one you got here. -RG
    | Posted on 2010-07-20 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this dance with the confusion of depression; change and its distanceing effect is so passionatly expressed here. and as it reaconects shortly to the meaning in the end it does a full rotation forceing you to read it again, and again
    | Posted on 2009-11-18 00:00:00 | by Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      "Making the connection from lonely to loved. "

    We can grasp time with our memories...it's almost like capturing moments with a camera but much much more intimate because we store it carefully in the rich archives of our lives for further inspection sometime later when we might need it or for it to be removed when no longer used but any time you want to go back in time all you have to do is remember. And sometimes...sometimes one can get lost in memories...lost in time...to the point where one can no longer see oneself anywhere anymore - not now, not yesterday, not tomorrow. Lost. Lost in some place, some event and almost always some PERSON from the past. That can be comforting but also dangerous. It's not easy to come back. When life throws hardships on our path we often use this getaway as an escape route. We go back to the times more cheerful, however, problems won't solve themselves. Sometimes, we need to have a look in the mirror and remember who we are today and how to make TODAY something to be remembered.

    This is in a way how I saw this poem even though there is maybe more of a love context in there. Of course you probably didn't imagine it that way but then again, poetry is seen subjectively by each individual simply because it's not...linear. We all have our own unique way of imagining things, unique perception but you can tell that someones poetry is good when it can reach people. This was a good read.
    | Posted on 2009-08-02 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you Jim for your comment ... I read through some of your other poems .. Prefer Pagans ( which I am . Wicca to the core ). Power and Bad man Blues... all great work !
    | Posted on 2009-07-16 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]


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