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    dots Submission Name: The King and Queen of Heartsdots
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    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       ...Midnight musings; I wonder if I was dreaming.


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    dotsThe King and Queen of Heartsdots
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    There is certain delight in wandering eyes
    Our swiftest glances are concrete
    And when our hands wander we remember
    Doing this dance with someone similar

    The sheets tangle tight and warm
    Limbs entwine in separate codas, latching, grasping
    And we canít seem to separate
    Our hearts beat off key and in sync
    Not to please you, but, always around you
    Itís not hard to make a semblance of normal

    I donít mind, if you donít mind
    Thereís a certain delight in giving chances
    And when our fingers touch its only heart breaking
    So when the sun rises and youíre still here
    Please, please follow me.

    Somethingís are tentative like this
    But I prefer the darkness, the heat
    And if you can keep up, we can sanctify it with lemon kisses
    Tasting each other like licking salt off old wounds
    And itís alright this way
    Itís alright.




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      I got from this poem a physical relationship that the narrarator considered bringing to something more, but in the end decided that they "prefer the darkness, the heat."
    If I got that wrong, I'm really sorry! :) All in all I really liked the images you conjured. I also noticed and loved the "lemon kisses" and "like licking salt off old wounds" is a wonderful phrase that can carry so many separate meanings to the poem. I think that one line pulls it all together nicely and brings a whole new element- almost like a plot twist. Thanks for sharing!
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent and very satisfying poem, all on a difficult subject which you have mastered in this delightful poem! Love for the sake of love, maybe an enjoyable fling, a desirous interlude, maybe something more.

    Excellent write, lovely lady!

    | Posted on 2008-12-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a fine lusty poem. Images like concrete glances and lemon kisses are strong. I feel the freedom of the speaker joining with another but still one's self. - Jim
    | Posted on 2008-12-17 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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