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    dots Submission Name: Ice Feathersdots
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    Author: Shadowstar13
    Elite Ratio:    4.88 - 183/171/118
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 95
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 589



    Description:
       NOW COMPLETE. UNLESS I DECIDE TO EDIT IT. For those who might care, I took the title from a "Leave's Eyes" song (Finnish band. You probably don't know them. Unless, of course, you're Finnish.) Albeit the fact that the song I took it from-"A Winter's Poem"-is a (horror of horrors) love song, I think it fits perfectly.


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    dotsIce Feathersdots
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    All is white, from the sky to the ground
    Crystalline nether-world so surreal
    An icy barrier is quieting all sound
    The numb of the cold seems to heal
    A scarred, pockmarked earth

    The heartbeat of an iced mother-earth
    Seems to pulse beneath the tree's frozen feet
    The spirits seem to laugh with mirth
    And dance-apparitions of ice and sleet

    The hailing ice softens to snow
    Dusting this dormant realm in white
    Giving this world an unearthly glow
    As if bathed in a nether-world's light




    Submitted on 2008-12-16 21:37:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was written very well. I liked it alot.
    It was very descripted and painted a picture in my mind.
    Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-12-18 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I like it. I'm afraid I can't connect though since I've never seen snow myself but I liked the vibe it had. Very nice.
    | Posted on 2008-12-17 00:00:00 | by SDodson | [ Reply to This ]


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