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    dots Submission Name: missed connectionsdots
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    Author: Myopic
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 31/58/63
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsmissed connectionsdots
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    Missed connections follow after tension
    of the heart's poor, anxious list of things to do
    and the battle-tired brain's electricity
    bill.
    warring against the outside --
    those childhood years.
    Dark circles
    in the eye's round corner,
    windowing to wonderful space,
    now bigger --
    infinite. bored.
    The summer's gone with your dragonfly, your
    sad eyes chasing the ground until they
    close to see that serene,
    glowing mother angel
    scratched into the bathroom wall:

    Ugly is not -true- (walk free)

    viciousness is a lie, always.

    you close your eyes;
    black. space.
    space not between planets,
    but between
    people.




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      this piece is seemingly disconnected at first glance, first read. it seems haphazardly penned but i know that it's not, that it's actually very considered, very thoughtful, and overall, very original in phrasing and parsing and intent.

    i really like how you've set this up visually: your use of linebreaks/enjambment pulls this along perfectly. as for subject matter, i see and feel a lot of things: disaffection mostly, a tired resolve at things we must deal with over and over, mixed with passion and energy.

    that space between people that you mention in your closing lines is a quixotic and thoughtful statement. i definitely agree with this; there'll always be that void that cannot be bridged, no matter how close one is to the other. or maybe we are alike in that however warm and seemingly connected we seem to be to others, there'll always be that place where one will never touch. that place of solitude and reflection and endless joy and sorrow, yes.

    figured i should leave a reason why i faved this.
    i enjoyed the mood of this, the focused yet unfocused passion.
    | Posted on 2008-12-25 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]


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