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    dots Submission Name: incandescent effervescent phosphorescentdots

    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsincandescent effervescent phosphorescentdots

    the months passed
    without a flowery word from my pen
    it's all poppycock
    it's all that shit for people with feelings
    i don't own those anymore

    my mind became a product of structure
    clicking and beeping
    the gears turning and switching
    a well-oiled machine

    i didn't need anyone
    i knew they didn't need me
    i was trapped but free
    it was so strangely simple.

    and then they came like a disease
    popping up and pricking, poking, piercing
    my skin
    'remember me?'
    well how could i ever forget?
    i don't want to forget what happened today
    but i want to forget what happened today
    your enveloping arms don't exist
    and yet oh, they do so vividly
    i was content with my shield
    i was content without the field
    i was content with the filter in my mind

    you're fumbling
    you're reaching
    you're learning and teaching
    you're more stable than i'll ever wish to be

    but you found my heel
    and shot it with the only arrow you had
    did you know?
    I don't love you
    and to say so
    would be a bitter falsity.

    it's more of a forced happiness
    as if
    I'm standing under the fiery sun
    and straining to push it up over the ragged horizon
    for a moment the world is illuminated
    for a moment the world is
    and all those other bright epiphany words
    - and then my arms buckle under all the weight
    and the sun tumbles, tumbles, tumbles
    hits the moon and crumbles
    and all that's left is a sky full of lonely stars.

    Submitted on 2008-12-18 21:59:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this write. It's a new favorite. It flowed so nicely and spun on itself making some lines only something you could understand and hold dear. I don;t even think theres more I could say on the matter. Amazing write, keep 'em coming.
    | Posted on 2008-12-18 00:00:00 | by SDodson | [ Reply to This ]
      "I don't love you
    and to say so
    would be a bitter falsity." Such strong words. I enjoy it.

    "I was content..." was my favorite line. Never have I heard someone so blatantly admit to not wanting to be trapped in love. It could do
    with punctuation and capital letters, but even with those distractions this poem is quite refreshing from the usual fluffy, dishonest, flowery bullshixt about love in here.
    Saol fada chugat,

    | Posted on 2008-12-18 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]

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