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    dots Submission Name: The Music is Blackdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 121
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1248



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       Lil Wayne ya'll


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    dotsThe Music is Blackdots
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    I've done solarized the polar ice
    And watched it get hot,
    Get hot

    I've smoked the finest greens
    I'm telling you girl,
    The finest things
    We could make a song that everyone sings
    And I'd break it down
    And I'm telling you now
    To get hot,
    Get hot

    We'd both put a stop
    To our heart attack ways
    Stop and say hey no
    I don't play anymore games,

    I'd still play though
    If you know what I mean

    Just spark it, breathe it
    Live it, and feel it
    Learn to believe it
    The lies I let lie and do justify
    It's alright,
    It's gonna be okay
    She never really gave a shit, anyways,
    One love,
    So live it that-away

    Bullet holes, bleeding hearts
    And coked up noses
    It ain't music
    It's a crack house
    So baby don't confuse it
    And lose it,
    So clueless
    So seductively elusive
    It's like you're abusive
    It's so stupid,
    So confining
    That this place is still dying
    And I'm not going back.




    Submitted on 2008-12-19 03:21:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So seductively alusive.


    Nice. As always. Strange, but nice. It sounds random, but I think a lot of raps are like that, so not a big deal. The whole thing really isn't my cup of tea, but I'm more of a water gal anyway. Your poetry transfers to your rap, but like a lot of rap lyrics--less so, if I may venture to say so--It's kind of off. Not something I'd want my little sister to understand.


    Nice, though. NO surprise there.
    | Posted on 2008-12-21 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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