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    Author: Immortalis
    ASL Info:    29/M/Unknown
    Elite Ratio:    7.59 - 43/17/8
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    As the silence grows, so fades the unanswered call
    Skin of a wolf, heart of an angel, yet like a demon falls
    Questions mount yet go unanswered, proud eyes filled with tears

    A hand reached out in friendship, which quickly turned to love,
    The love became a heavenly bond, destiny above.
    Yet without warning comes the hand of man; he turns those bonds to dust.
    One gift alone remains, Will she unbind my chains, and release me like the dove?

    And have we reached the pinnacle of this endless night?
    What did either of us do to be cursed with this plight?
    Far and few are the ones held most dear,
    Ever increases the blackness, two souls without light.

    Twas not mortal beauty that held me fast
    Or animal lust, that like all things does pass
    No candy heart pulsed in this chest
    As our Ancestors said, there is nothing that lasts.

    Ancient their wisdom yet I ignored
    This world and its kind Iíve always abhorred
    Who pities the fallen warrior?
    What honor remains it will never change that, only you I adored

    Once did I speak of those Angel eyes,
    How little I knew of the tears they did cry
    Should I harden my heart, or await her reply?
    Those eyes I canít see yet I still remember
    And unto her silence I must surrender




    Submitted on 2008-12-19 14:58:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Im sorry I didnt comment this; I figured it will be submitted to deletion soon enough and was not sure how soon 'soon' would be.

    A hand reached out in friendship, which quickly turned to love,
    The love became a heavenly bond, destiny above.
    Yet without warning comes the hand of man; he turns those bonds to dust.

    This I can imagine perfectly; the hand of a woman reached out to you/the man, then the hands holding eachother, or maybe even the two people wrapped in an embrace (hand of freindship turned to love). Then the hands of the world; the terrible terrible hands of man, ripping apart the women and the man. Leaving them with severed bonds, though their love was not thr problem.


    Really outstanding imagery and symbolism in this poem, as I read through it I can see it all happening im my head, feel it, understand it.

    Great job-
    Definelty not bad at all

    -Safire
    | Posted on 2008-12-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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