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    dots Submission Name: Stockholm's Syndromedots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 378
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 926
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2559



    Description:
       The fear of letting you know this.
    Of having you see me as weak,
    tears me inside.
    But you deserve an explaination.
    I understand my place.


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    dotsStockholm's Syndromedots
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    Home is where I left my heart.
    Home in your arms,
    Home I am without.

    Shocked by how far we've come
    And I write letters,
    Falling letters.
    Words never convey,
    How far I've come.

    Words never give away Me,
    The shattered shell I once was,
    still haunts me.
    But I can survive again.
    Hold me down.

    Surviving is not a question.
    Never a question for me.
    But strength takes so much.
    Beautiful in your words,
    spun like the clouds in my eyes.
    My thoughts. Center around You.
    My thoughts, I wish with all that is me,
    That they wouldn't disolve like my uneven seams,
    I caught on to their little game.
    Just a little too late.

    Do you feel that beat?
    Lonliness, deep inside of me.
    Don't you feel that soft thud?
    That's what I am without you,
    Just a heartbeat, love.

    It's so easy, I swear,
    Icarus fell,
    Ceaser fell,
    We all fall down.

    And I'm calling you.
    Calling for your help.
    these tears...
    Pooling in my eyes.
    Nothing is easy.
    Not even washing this blood.
    Not washing this blood away.
    Washing the blood away with sin.
    Sin.
    How is loving you a sin?

    The sin lays within you loving me.
    How can someone love me?
    I understand my place.
    Keep them happy.
    Always Happy.
    Backbone sanded away.
    Sanded away by years of hate and...
    their words.

    I'm terrified to stand up.
    The strength you have, I lack.
    I lay here with a flesh wound.
    Only a Broken Back.

    The sea goes in and out
    like my days.
    voices only fade in and out,
    only constant is the blood sputtering from my lips,
    wipe it away, using my sleeve,
    the heart on my sleeve becomes bloodied,
    Bloodied, but not broken.

    I'll sell myself to you,
    How much would you pay?
    Can I get your undying love?
    or is that too much?

    Nothing will stop me from flying.
    I will fly twice around the moon!
    Or Just aimlessly float.

    If I die before I wake,
    can I get a proper burial?
    Will you bury me,
    Bury me within your heart?

    By the way,
    (How selfish of me)
    How are you today?




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      If I die before I wake,
    can I get a proper burial?
    Will you bury me,
    Bury me within your heart?

    By the way,
    (How selfish of me)
    How are you today?


    Okay...I got sucked in right away. You described your pain/longing so well, that I feel as if it were my own. Then it started to get too long, of the same thing (if you know what I mean), but then BAM, you totally killed it with the above stanzas. Killed, as in awesome! Halfway through it, I didn't think I would like it, but I am glad I continued reading, for I am now impressed.
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]
      there is always a way to undo "the syndrome!"
    it is with tender, loving care, and an ear for you to spill your secrets, attached to a mouth that will never speak a word to another. a heart that will NEVER REST IN PEACE untill you are sound asleep and comfortable. and someone that will NEVER SAY A WORD AGAINST YOU, TREAT YOU IN ANY MANNER UNDESERVING THE MOST BEAUTIFUL GODDESS( which you are), NOR LEAVE YOU ALONE TO FEND OFF THE WORLD BY YOURSELF FOR ANY REASON WHAT SO EVER!
    OH, THAT WOULD BE ME!
    ( but you already know all this!)
    > < > < > < > <
    8 8 8 8
    FOUR BIG KISSES FOR CAROSEL!
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by SAGITTREVEALED | [ Reply to This ]
      your work is constantly evolving and every new piece is better than the last. you are so talented, my Angel! i am proud of your ability. my Genius!

    i love you, my Precious One.

    love and kisses,
    hugz n misses,
    Mummie
    | Posted on 2008-12-21 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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