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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 277
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    Deliliah the cricket hopped over to a field mouse collecting sticks. She perched on top of a rock and observed the mouse.

    "What a creative mind you have mouse."
    Said she as the mouse put them in order all around a small hole in the ground.

    "My name is Stephan and I am merely collecting sticks."

    Deliliah did not reply. She turned over what the mouse Stephan said to her and made herself more comfortable on the rock.

    "Well I, (she chirped her throat in a small note of ahem) pardon me, rather. I guessed you were covering that hole for protection." She blinked her eyes and waited for Stephan to reply.

    Stephan sighed.
    "So it is."
    And in regarding her, continued, "I assumed you were aware of the goal, it is after all a common technique for when the North comes down."

    "Right, and I wasn't aware."

    "Well then." Stephan concluded and promptly returned to the sticks.

    "Still though, did you learn that from the other creatures?" she asked.

    Stephan. "Actually no. This instinct for survival is stock."

    "Right, well you are the first mouse I have ever observed at it, and you get the credit."

    Stephan smiled.

    "Do you need any help?" said Deliliah

    "Actually, if you don't mind. It would save me a bit of time."

    "Time? What would you do with that." Deliliah had plenty of time to herself actually, and quite a short lifespan.

    "Oh I often thought about what I would do." He looked up into her eyes, and there was nothing left to say.




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      It wasn't [censored]ty. Why a cricket and a mouse? Time -- sticks being gathered . . . a metaphor for days passing by? General survival isntinct . . . is it cool if you break it down some?
    | Posted on 2008-12-25 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Very neat

    this is the first thing i have read today that is creative and original and the pretyy cool and unusual around here this day and age
    Plus I love storytelling


    | Posted on 2008-12-21 00:00:00 | by spoonfedprop | [ Reply to This ]


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