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    dots Submission Name: Who the Hell are YOUdots
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    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 899
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       This was written when I was confined in a place long ago where bible thumpers would shove the word of god down my throat. I don't believe I should be forced to believe anything.


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    dotsWho the Hell are YOUdots
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    Warm milk and sedatives
    Only death where vendetta lives
    Tears seep down where blisters form
    An eruption of chaos in a whirling storm
    Fingers point and knuckles crack
    Exfoliate the old to bring the youth back
    Hang on tight the rain's up ahead
    Cries from the churches, screams for the dead

    Who the hell are you to keep me here?
    The will to survive, or fucked up fear?
    Who the hell are you to hand out pain?
    Let a few swim and the others drown in the rain

    A warm fuzzy blanket and a handful of meds
    Holes slowly form when you pull out the threads
    Nothing heals like a healthy cry
    Especially for the addict that can't get high
    Headaches attack like forks to the brain
    The more desperate attempts to poke through a vein
    A puncture wound with no intentions to heal
    Give me one fucking reason to bow down and kneel

    Who the hell are you taking in all the fame?
    Casting down shadows to point the blame.
    Who the hell are you to bring love into fight?
    Beauty abused and lost in the night.

    I have no respect for hungering power
    Piece by piece, they always devour




    Submitted on 2008-12-22 04:39:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very powerful and self-defeated piec eyou have presented here. I've not lived an addict's life so I'm in no position to judge or advise.
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by ExactlyThat | [ Reply to This ]


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