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    dots Submission Name: Shining in the Darkdots
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    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsShining in the Darkdots
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    Right now in this moment

    There is only me

    Not a sinner nor a saint

    Or who you claim to be

    Right now in this moment

    Where I can shine bright

    Where no one can see me

    In the dead of the night




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      So deep! Yet your taking respect for yourself. nice.
    | Posted on 2010-11-26 00:00:00 | by Apteryx | [ Reply to This ]
      In a weird way, the dark exposes our true selves. Out come the fears and hesitations, the worries, the memories and the dreams. We put our masks on the shelves again, to wait for morning and sunlight and prying eyes.

    It seems like your lying with someone. It's mostly focused on the subject, but then there's the:

    "Or who you claim to be"

    maybe someone else is shining too. Maybe there's fear of shining in front of someone, unless the comfort of pitch black is there.

    Anywho, I like this. It's nice language, brief but not fleeting, and there is a feeling of shining through the loneliness. When all is cold and dark around us, our heart still beats warm.

    Either that or you're naturally luminescent like the deep sea angler.
    | Posted on 2008-12-23 00:00:00 | by FallenGrace | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of a rose, reclusive in the dark, waiting for the sunlight to turn her into a beautiful flower! Nice work, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2008-12-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      There is such a feeling of isolation in this peice and I can't really tell if this isolation of by design to avoid any possible hurts that life can deal out. Bring that light to the daytime and you'll shine doubly.
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by ExactlyThat | [ Reply to This ]


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