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    dots Submission Name: CHISELdots
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    Author: SAGITTREVEALED
    ASL Info:    22/m/ P.C. FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 26/26/16
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 827
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 828



    Description:
       to let her know i think of her constant struggle.


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    dotsCHISELdots
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    A broken back,
    a shattered heart!
    words spewed forth,
    to tear you apart.

    a head of curcuits,
    a heart of stone!
    A man of darkness
    that's been all alone.

    a chisel to chip,
    the tip is broke!
    still a bone, I fashion
    for you, of solid OAK.

    a program of love,
    a chisel that's sharp!
    your voice rings true,
    my heavenly harp.

    the fire of hearth,
    to drown out the words!
    my heart now open,
    to all your concerns.

    the light in the myst,
    the sound of your song!
    the love in your heart,
    guides, to where i belong!

    A stock for your chisel,
    a honing for mine!
    together we carve,
    a life so devine.




    Submitted on 2008-12-22 04:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this peice Hunni!
    It's beautiful.

    <3 Yours.
    | Posted on 2008-12-23 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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