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    dots Submission Name: Don't Look Backdots

    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I believe we choose the paths that we take before we are even born. So, as I accept the fact that I chose a relentless path, I can actually move on from it and maybe, just maybe, rise above it to find that ultimate experience. We'll see.

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    dotsDon't Look Backdots

    Valium induced but reality smacked
    Thought I had fallen and gotten back up
    The pressure on my knees as a matter of fact,
    Tells me it's never really enough

    Lesson after lesson I continue to burn
    I chose to walk barefoot, despite cold weather
    Lost in the dark from another wrong turn
    Too much exposure turns silk into leather

    I turn to look just one last time
    It's the second guessing to a different tune
    Should I return to claim what was once mine?
    Or shut the lid to this empty tomb?

    Lesson after lesson as the years go by
    Chosen a path of chaos and fear
    I walk away slow, but I will not cry
    For there's no such thing as just one tear

    Here I go through uncharted lands
    Beaten and bruised with nothing to pack
    Feeling the struggle of tempting hands
    But there is no fear, if I don't look back

    Submitted on 2008-12-22 04:55:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravo! This is excellent! If ever there was a poetic description of bravery and determination, this is it!

    You done good on this, pretty lady! Those who have been there will know what you are talking about!
    | Posted on 2008-12-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      "There is no such thing as one tear"-

    "But there is no fear, If I don't look back"

    Both those statements are deeply touching to me. I enjoyed the fact that in the end you are rising above, moving on and becoming better instead of letting the past beat you down.

    Great writ.
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that is a powerful story about pain and the working through and past it, for lingering in it gets you nowhere fast. I truly enjoyed your message and the fine way it was presented.
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by ExactlyThat | [ Reply to This ]

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