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    dots Submission Name: A Dog Like Youdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.83 - 262/263/207
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 83
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1915



    Description:
       The last thing I wrote about him and right now, I feel really good about it.

    Dedication: Christopher Lynch


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    dotsA Dog Like Youdots
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    You told me
    "I love you"
    And I was naïve' e enough to believe you.
    I lived through
    All your lies
    Because I thought I loved you too.
    I let you
    Steal my heart
    Because I wanted to be in you life
    I wanted to
    Give you my hand
    Because I wanted to be your wife.

    Now I want to
    Slam you head against the wall.
    I want you to
    Have to go through it all.
    All the pain that you
    Put everyone else through
    But now I'm glad I'm through with
    A dog like you.

    You told her
    "You loved her too."
    And she fell for the same thing I did.
    She walked in
    On you and your slut
    Sex in the air as you both hid.
    Now you say
    That you love her
    But that don't explain everything you do.
    And now you say
    While talking to her
    That you still love me too.

    Now I want to
    Slam you head against the wall.
    I want you to
    Have to go through it all.
    All the pain that you
    Put everyone else through
    But now I'm glad I'm through with
    A dog like you.

    Every time
    You're with someone
    You go back to your piece of shit whore.
    You tell us
    You don't love her
    But you seem to care about her more.
    Because every time
    You fall in love
    You're always in the bed with her.
    It seems as if
    The heart you have
    Is never where you said it were.

    Now I want to
    Slam you head against the wall.
    I want you to
    Have to go through it all.
    All the pain that you
    Put everyone else through
    But now I'm glad I'm through with
    A dog like you.





    Submitted on 2008-12-23 04:50:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you ever heard of juice newton? she has a wonderful song along the vein of this piece you have here:



    Midnight,
    and I'm a-waiting
    on the twelve-oh-five
    Hoping it'll take me
    just a little farther down the line

    Moonlight,
    you're just a heartache in disguise;
    Won't you keep my heart from breaking
    if it's only for a very short time

    Chorus:
    Playing with the queen of hearts,
    knowing it ain't really smart
    The joker ain't the only fool
    who'll do anything for you

    Laying out another lie,
    thinking 'bout a life of crime
    That's what I'll have to do
    to keep me away from you

    Honey, you know it makes you mad
    Why is everybody telling everybody
    what you have done
    Baby, I know it makes you sad
    But when they're handing out the heartaches
    you know you got to have you some

    Chorus:

    Lovers, I know you've had a few
    But hide your heart beneath the covers
    and tell 'em they're the only one
    And others, they know just
    what I'm going through
    And it's a-hard to be a lover
    when you say you're only in it for fun
    Playing with the queen of hearts,
    knowing it ain't really smart
    The joker ain't the only fool
    who'll do anything for you



    its quite the break-up song you got here really. and fair enough. sounds like you got the wrong end of the stick completely. i hve a tshirt that says BOYS LIE... would you like to wear it for a while? kinda like wearing black out of mourning respect except you;d be wearing a huge statement of angriness that more would identify with than you'd believe...

    i guess you wont be so willing to give your heart to a boy in the future... that isnt always a bad thing but dont let this experience convince you that all boys are liars and scum... aparently there are some nice ones still out there
    | Posted on 2008-12-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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