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    dots Submission Name: Christmas.dots
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    Author: obsidiandreams
    ASL Info:    29/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 169/212/105
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I just felt like writing a piece in the spirit of either Christmas or simply winter.


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    dotsChristmas.dots
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    Sparkling ashen faucets of frost born rain
    Sheeting celestial grace across fields of our souls
    Grant us empowerment through clarification
    While holding us together through the mist
    Gift given symbolism baths us in companionship
    Leaving yearning for our reassembly
    Under winters silver wings




    Submitted on 2008-12-25 01:28:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love holiday/seasonally themed poetry! This was lovely.

    Somehow, this doesn't make me feel nostalgic. Not because I've never had a pleasant christmas... it just makes me think of my christmas celebrations in 10 years. I think it's because of the more "adult" viewpoint on it. It was nice to read a christmas poem that wasn't written from the way a child would feel.

    "Gift given symbolism baths us in companionship"

    I especially like this line. I sometimes feel that Christmas tends to be only about the gifts and money. Sometimes it is, but the symbolism behind them - giving does indeed remind us of our friendships.

    "Leaving yearning for our reassembly"

    Another great line. Family may not always get along, but christmas is a time to forget all of that and rejoice. And when it's over, well, you sorta miss it. I know I do.

    Also, 10 points for using the word "celestial." Love that word. :D

    Keep Writing,
    Elle
    | Posted on 2008-12-27 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]


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