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    dots Submission Name: It's 3am, Do You Know Where Your Demons Are?dots

    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       The demon fairies kept me up the other night and this is what came of it. Felt better when I was done writing.

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    dotsIt's 3am, Do You Know Where Your Demons Are?dots

    So many years, so many years
    Thought the demons were dead
    I rub my eyes as the smoke clears
    Awake they fly throughout my head

    Images so taunting like moths to the flame
    One after the other on a suicide ride
    Kisses from the fire branded never the same
    Another night awake with nowhere to hide

    Closing my eyes provokes the attacks
    Rock to and fro with my head in my knees
    Need something strong just to relax
    Sleep through this poetic disease

    No more, no more, I want no more!
    Stop showing your hideous face
    Thought I was healed yet I am still sore
    Chaos digested in the spawn of my grace

    Hours prior I had a smile
    Hours prior I was ready to sleep
    When demons are knocking there is no denial
    There's really no surface when you've gone too deep

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      This is very good. The terrible thing about nightmares is that they exist in the ether, and we can't get our hands on them or control them; they have a life of their own!

    The stanza that I liked the best was the last one:

    'Hours prior I had a smile
    Hours prior I was ready to sleep
    When demons are knocking there is no denial
    There's really no surface when you've gone too deep'

    I think it needs a stronger title; a suggestion would be "When Demons Are Knocking"?

    Nice work, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2008-12-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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