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    dots Submission Name: under the black spotlightdots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       i cant believe its you

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    dotsunder the black spotlightdots

    i wish i never see you again you aint even a friend this shit aint even pretend are we about to begin who is the enemy i let you stay ahead of me so i can creep in the back door while you creepin in the window you couldnt even shadow right so you leave me keepin this shit tight and you better know we doo this shit right underneatrh the blacklight spotlight

    why you keep hatin why you keep fakin like you aint bouts to be flakinnow you see what im takin over and its you you can never do what you wanted to do you cant even be true to you so how could you be true to me i will never let them vie us as we if thats what you believe you should leave cuz im not the one to go and you will be the last to know when im bouts to show my face this is what i paint this is what i create i aint takin your bait who are you to be in my fate its too late you could never relate or understand what im goin through how the world is blue of what im bouts to do i could kills you

    while you was dyin i was cryin in the corner of the bathroom on the floor and im staring at myself in my eyes and i see an even darker fear have i really just lost you to this gun wound yodid i do this to you i ask myself what i Cn do to save you to enslave you and use your dying body before you hve a chance to forget that i was the threat and the next time ou try you better recognize who yuo messin with who are you testin bitch

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      Sorry, I don't have much criticism. But, I like your style. I couldn't really read it right until I said it aloud. Alot of what I see anymore is cryptic sounding or people stick to conventional styles of poetry.
    | Posted on 2009-02-04 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]

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