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    dots Submission Name: Monsterdots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       'loved one as idiot'

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    dotsMonsterdots
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    Monster

    What? What did you see?

    Itís my job
    To disbelieve
    The oneís Iíve sworn
    To protect, to claim that
    Youíre mad, the danger
    Is a dream, the masked men
    Are a metaphor for longing

    So stay here please
    Close to the floor, donít breathe
    Itís best you donít remember
    All the terrors in the dark
    That donít exist

    Shhh honey, thereís nothing there
    No, Iím not bleeding. I have no blood

    Why are you so frightened?




    Submitted on 2008-12-27 17:45:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very sharp , imagination great , suspense is wonderful , bring some drama , great poem
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagination can be a frightening thing.
    Imagination denied is even more frightening, in my humble opinion.
    An interesting read, to be sure.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2008-12-30 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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