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    dots Submission Name: Diary Entry: To Daddots
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    Author: EEKS
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    dotsDiary Entry: To Daddots
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    Looking through the glass pane in the back door, I hear you yelling in the garage. That is how loud you are. You pass through two doorways, through the sunlit driveway with your anger. And it was such a beautiful day, I almost couldn't believe you were angry... Almost.

    Now you are on the ladder, making enough noise that I am unable to watch my indie film about this irresistible girl with long blonde hair. The ladder is slightly off balance and I notice as you climb that I should hold it for you but I don't get up. I just sit there as you disappear into the ceiling and then I unpause my movie.




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      That must of been a good flick,
    and sounds like your at a friend house
    that I know I hope we're not living the same life.
    | Posted on 2008-12-28 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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