[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Enthrall Me Again, If You Pleasedots

    Author: ExactlyThat
    Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 4/7/9
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 680
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1611


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsEnthrall Me Again, If You Pleasedots

    Wandering aimlessly, punctuating each thought
    that careens through your susceptible mind.
    Mulling over lessons that living has taught
    many of which have yet to be wholly refined.

    Rhetorical questions float in amongst the clatter,
    how much time can you truly devote to those?
    Playing this guessing game is a part of the batter
    that leads to that next poem or literate prose.

    Donít discount thoughts that seem quite inane,
    Nurtured properly they just might seem profound.
    Grab a hold of that moment of lingering pain,
    giving it air may help another sufferer rebound.

    We story tellers have been given such a gift
    that should never be given to laziness waste.
    The sands of time always continue to shift,
    sample each passing notion for its savory taste.

    Itís in the telling that the story gives emerging birth
    to words that may touch others in varying ways.
    Believe in your intuition, never doubt the worth,
    get it down in writing before the inspiration decays.

    Lyrical treatment can bear so many different fruits,
    a cornucopia that spills brilliantly onto the page.
    Your pen is locked and loaded, it steadily shoots
    rapid fire tales that eventual readers will engage.

    Keep the images coming, for I hunger for your sights,
    they fill me with wonder and take me away.
    Polish the finite details and then offer up your writes,
    your masterpiece just may immortalize you today.

    Submitted on 2008-12-28 20:34:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      be honest about what you think and put diffrent kinds of emotion in it
    | Posted on 2008-12-30 00:00:00 | by Megalicious | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]