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    dots Submission Name: Lady Jealousy dots

    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 207/277/230
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLady Jealousy dots

    Jaded curiosity from the seething mouth of jealousy
    she wore a leash like any dog, but always ran away
    she broke my heart, then broke the bank
    who is to say those heated emotions weren't well founded
    your lies, and the way you would always lose yourself
    maybe my fits of rage and anguish were rooted in bed with you
    under the covers, Iím in his head and you...
    you fucking screamed his name you bitch,
    twice with me, but more with him
    did he scratch that fucking itch you had?
    Guess it goes to show how much love I really had
    if I was smarter I would've called your bluffs back then
    but maybe I wanted to believe that someone somewhere
    might just maybe give a damn.
    you are a soprano, and your every love a tragedy
    and those soap opera drama's never had a place with me
    you cheat the game, and Iíll walk away
    I donít deserve that shit, my damn ma-dame
    All I ever wanted was someone genuine
    but maybe I was asking too much.

    Submitted on 2008-12-28 23:11:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... this is powerful. I can actually feel the bitter resentment you have here, especially from the middle down. You gave it to her good, haha!! Well, I don't know if I can say much here, this is purely a poem from emotions. You can't make corrections on those, but this powerful, man. A bit scary, even haha.

    Keep living,
    | Posted on 2008-12-29 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]

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