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    dots Submission Name: Three Questionsdots
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    Author: sunsetserenity
    ASL Info:    21/f
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 23/17/12
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThree Questionsdots
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    Who are you, anyway?
    Dancing up to me, causing catastrophe,
    then prancing away.

    Who am I?
    Allowing the silky breeze, who cannot decide,
    to influence my direction.

    And what is this?
    A concealed unknown, so alluring, so enticing,
    so foreign to me.

    You cannot argue,
    you cannot change, and you cannot finish.
    You can only soften.




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      wow.

    the rhythm here is evident. very catchy. i always 'read' poems for that rhythm; i guess it's the only way to discern the mood and tempo the author was/is going for... so i do. and i enjoy this one, too... because it's so open to interpretation. i think there's a... fickle beauty to that, that art of musical arrangement and double, triple, quadruple meanings... and which one is right? which one matters? which one connects... with you? right?

    three questions to and about a boy or a girl, perhaps? that's what i see, feel here. a hunch.
    a perception.

    i bet you play an instrument or two of some sort.

    this piece...
    is confused and passionate.
    | Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]


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